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Friday 3 May 2019

The funnest land for kid's

This week we have been learning how to create a piece of writing using a picture to help us. First we had a class brainstorm on what the picture was about, then we brainstorming some adjectives. Finally we started our writing. I am sharing it with you, please leave me a comment.   
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One sunny day a little girl went to have a holiday with her family. But her mum when to tell the little girl and her dad when to tell her big sister then her dad went to tell her big brother. When her mum went to tell the little girl but she was asleep then she wake the little girl up. Then her dad went in her big brother's bedroom and her dad told her big brother. Then her dad went to her big sister’s bedroom to tell her big sister. When her mum told her she said you have to get you stuff ready now OK. Then the little girl said OK mum so when her mum left her bedroom she got some boxes and started to get her stuff and put it in the boxes.

















                                          Chapter 2Then her big brother got some boxes and got some stuff to put in the boxes. And her big sister got some boxes too then got her stuff and put it in the boxes but she was sad because she loved it here. Then the kid’s was done getting they stuff in the boxes then only two people had to do something it was the children’s mum and dad they got all of the boxes then got all there stuff and put it all in the boxes. When they packed they stuff they got they stuff that they packed in they boxes and put it in the car. When they mum and dad put they stuff in the car they all got in the car and went to the airport. But they plane was not there when they got there. Then dad said oh no I forgot we have a flying car that is our car let’s go. When they got in the car  with there packed thinks in the car with then they went to Never land. When they got there the little girl’s sister said OM this looks so fun to play on come on let’s go let’s go I what to go and play. Then mum saw a candy house and the little girl said om can we eat our house mum then mum said no then the little girl said oh oh.                                     Chapter 3Then they got they stuff in the boxes and went in they new house but they had to get to pack they bedroom’s before they had to put they stuff in the boxes in they bedrooms. But mum had to pack the little girl’s bedroom all the time and she did not want her mum packing her bedroom for her. Then she said mum I want to pack my bedroom OK then her dad said well she is 5 so can you stop getting worried about her OK then her mum said ok let’s go and get are stuff the car then when her mum and dad got they boxes of they stuff from they car they went back inside the house. Mum said where are we as she was talking to the little girl so she gave a map and said we are at OM MUM LOOK WE ARE AT THE FUNNEST LAND VERY WE ARE AT NEVER LAND. Then mum said go tell dad OK then the little girl said OK mum when the little girl found her dad she said to him dad guess what dad then her dad said are we at Los Vegas. Then the little girl said no dad we are in the funnest land where kid’s land it is never land dad.                  

Chapter 4 The last page




Then dad said om pack you safe and put it in the car now. When she packed her safe in her boxes she put it in the car Then her brother said want are you doing then the little girl said to him dad said to pack you safe and put it in the car now her big brother said why the little girl said because we are at never land so you have to pack you safe we are leaving now. Then the little girl went to her big sister's bedroom when she got they she said sis pack you safe and put it in the car now dad said to tell you. Then she went to tell her mum when she found here mum she said mum pack all you safe and put it in the car then mum said why then the little girl said dad said then the hole family pack they safe and put it in the car to go to move to Los Vegas.